Catherine Wu
Exploration is Important For Countries
_____Do you know the exploration? Exploration are the act of searching or traveling a terrain for the purpose of discovery, for example of unknown people, including space, for oil, gas, coal, ores, caves, water or information. Exploration did a huge job for countries; they are the heroes of a country when they finish a plan to explore. The space exploration in China is famous that all the people knew. Have you heard Yang Liwei? That's a famous person in China; he help China finish a new space exploration. Explorations are famous for a country that did a huge job for their countries. Explorations can get a lot of specific presents for their countries just like they can enlarge resources for the country, expand areas for the country and they can study some technology to help a country be stronger.
____Explorations can enlarge resources for the country. They can get a lot of resources when they finish a travel. For example, oil and gas resources are abundant in China. Although the exploration extent of the main petroliferous basins is high after long time exploration the amount of remained oil and gas resources is still large and it has the resources base for further development. After oil and gas exploration in 10 of years, the preservation conditions of remained oil resources become worse” and the proportion of low-quality resources was augmented, the remained oil and gas resources in subtle oil and gas reservoirs is enlarged”, rand oil and gas exploration is getting more difficult. Oil and gas exploration field in China will be broad in the future, not only has 4 big realistic exploration fields, include the fine exploration in mature basin, the litho-stratigraphic reservoirs, the foreyard and the lower-medium combination of superimposed basin, but also has some new exploration fields like Qinghai and Tibet, the south of the South China Sea, the marine carbonate rocks and "low quality” resources.
____Explorations can expand area for the country. They can get more energy then give it to their countries. I founded an example from the internet. The United States Geological Service estimates that the reserves in the area could be as much as 9.3 billion barrels of oil, although Cuban geologists are more optimistic and calculate reserves of 20 billion barrels, according to Culet’s exploration director, Rafael Torero. Future. Even so, the future of Cuban oil, especially maritime oil, is far from being clearly defined. The island can boast of having successfully begun the first "horizontal" drilling in its history, in northern waters. One of the most remarkable aspects of the operation is that it was carried out by Cuban workers trained in Canada. Right now, no assistance is being provided by foreign companies; the island's authorities recently cancelled the oil exploration contract they had signed with Canadian company Peterman, linked to the Sherri consortium.
____Explorations can study more technology to help a country be stronger. They can study some languages from other countries such as people can go to Canada study French. People who did exploration people are all admire him.
____Explorations did a huge job for their countries just like they can enlarge resources for the country, expand area for the country, and study some technology from other countries to help a country be stronger. Explorations are the heroes in people's heart. When they did an exploration, they can't see their children. When their houses have something trouble, they can't give up. That’s the exploration. They are the true hero. They are important for countries, if without them, maybe the country will not complete.
____Explorations can enlarge resources for the country. They can get a lot of resources when they finish a travel. For example, oil and gas resources are abundant in China. Although the exploration extent of the main petroliferous basins is high after long time exploration the amount of remained oil and gas resources is still large and it has the resources base for further development. After oil and gas exploration in 10 of years, the preservation conditions of remained oil resources become worse” and the proportion of low-quality resources was augmented, the remained oil and gas resources in subtle oil and gas reservoirs is enlarged”, rand oil and gas exploration is getting more difficult. Oil and gas exploration field in China will be broad in the future, not only has 4 big realistic exploration fields, include the fine exploration in mature basin, the litho-stratigraphic reservoirs, the foreyard and the lower-medium combination of superimposed basin, but also has some new exploration fields like Qinghai and Tibet, the south of the South China Sea, the marine carbonate rocks and "low quality” resources.
____Explorations can expand area for the country. They can get more energy then give it to their countries. I founded an example from the internet. The United States Geological Service estimates that the reserves in the area could be as much as 9.3 billion barrels of oil, although Cuban geologists are more optimistic and calculate reserves of 20 billion barrels, according to Culet’s exploration director, Rafael Torero. Future. Even so, the future of Cuban oil, especially maritime oil, is far from being clearly defined. The island can boast of having successfully begun the first "horizontal" drilling in its history, in northern waters. One of the most remarkable aspects of the operation is that it was carried out by Cuban workers trained in Canada. Right now, no assistance is being provided by foreign companies; the island's authorities recently cancelled the oil exploration contract they had signed with Canadian company Peterman, linked to the Sherri consortium.
____Explorations can study more technology to help a country be stronger. They can study some languages from other countries such as people can go to Canada study French. People who did exploration people are all admire him.
____Explorations did a huge job for their countries just like they can enlarge resources for the country, expand area for the country, and study some technology from other countries to help a country be stronger. Explorations are the heroes in people's heart. When they did an exploration, they can't see their children. When their houses have something trouble, they can't give up. That’s the exploration. They are the true hero. They are important for countries, if without them, maybe the country will not complete.
Focus 2/4
回复删除I get lost in your examples. Remember you need to use your own words to discuss the topic.
Organization 2/4
The third body paragraph is not developed. Your introduction is not really about your essay. The introduction talks about China but your essays talks about other countries as well. Introduce what you are going to talk about in your essay.
Usage 1/4
Your body paragraph are not your own words, so your essay is incomplete.
Style 2/4
I don’t know how to mark it because a lot of your essay is not in your own wods.
Content 1/4
You cannot just use an example from the Internet and not explain anything. You need to show your understanding. You must paraphrase your example. Just copying it is not enough for a good mark.
Your introduction and conclusion are in your own words. Some of the body paragraphs are in your own words. The examples and explanation are not. This is not acceptable.
8/20 x 2 = 16/40
You cannot just copy the example entirely from the internet.
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